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Here is a link to my new Storybook website called
Morgan's Mythology
The Goddess Venus
Here is a link to my new Storybook website called
Morgan's Mythology
The Goddess Venus
Hi Morgan! I'm giving feedback on your introduction to the storybook this week. The first thing I read is the title and it's catchy in that I'm already thinking about the different things that may happen in this story because high school for many people was such an awful time, as others really peaked while in high school. I'm interested to see how the twelve gods that you mentioned will all work together. Are there regular people in this high school, too? Or is it a special private school only for the gods? I like that you started with questions to get people thinking about your storybook. I'm really excited to read more stories by the time that I got to the end of the introduction. It will be interesting to see which gods you end up focusing on. As of now, it seems like Zeus but you have a really great set up here to talk about many different gods going to high school together.
ReplyDeleteYour intro intrigued me! Very clever idea to use senior superlatives to give readers an idea of what each of the 12 major gods will be like. I laughed at Hephaestus as “Most Likely to Marry His Car.” Also, very smart idea to mention the setting at the end. It will be a boarding school in the mountains in Crete—this already prompts some questions, and it makes me want to read on.
ReplyDeleteOne thing you could include in the introduction to add intrigue: you could talk about the conflicts to come. Those familiar with Greek mythology, will already have some idea of what stories could come up, but your setting will clearly affect those classic stories in some way. If you have an idea of what stories you’re going to include, you could go ahead and write a little blurb about one or two of them and how they’re different. Or, you could mention rivalries and other relationships between the gods—Hera being Zeus’ girlfriend, for example, or a rivalry between Ares and Hephaestus.
Just a few suggestions! I look forward to reading more.
Morgan, that was great! I chose to read your introduction because your title intrigued me and it was different in that I had never thought about gods going to high school haha. You chose a topic that will be exciting to explore, because there are so many avenues or approach to this story topic.
ReplyDeleteWhen I read your introduction I thought that your stories could have or even be humorous at the core. This might not be the direction that you're wanting to take, but a story about Dionysis doing something crazy or saying something crazy (maybe about Zeus cheating on Hera?) would be hilarious. Then, of course, Hermes spreading that little tidbit to everyone throughout the school would be typical high school drama.
To me, Hermes is going to be a key player/character in your stories because he's probably involved in everyone's business. Even if you don't make Hermes a main character, I look forward to reading about how you utilize him throughout your stories.
One last thing. I'm doing my storybook project over Hephaestus, so if he does marry his car, make it a '67 mustang or a mach 1 mustang (hint hint, wink wink) Lol.
Hello Morgan! The title of your storybook caught my eye from the beginning! I think your title is a perfect indication of what your storybook will be over. Your introduction is great! I cannot wait to read your stories. I think you did a great job putting a modern and more relatable spin on stories that are very old time and can be difficult to read. I think the way you made them into a sort of “who’s who” type of a list is so cool! It is so creative and is something completely unique. It gives them a more real personality that is more known in high school settings. I think you did a good job reeling people in to read the stories! I know I am very intrigued. I like how you gave a background of them all saying they are seniors and that they go to a private boarding school. Good job!
ReplyDeleteThe concept of a school for gods is definitely one you can have a lot of fun with and holds potential to be entertaining. There's also a very "yearbook" like feel to what direction you're going to take that I like.
ReplyDeleteI think more background on what being a god entails in this world and the purpose of this school for gods would make your premise even more intriguing, giving more of a sense that they are people inhabiting a world rather than names inhabiting a space. I can tell getting these students' personality will come in the stories, so I have no problem there.
There are a few diction quirks I noticed, such as using the "God" pronoun to refer to "gods" as a collective, unnecessary "a" and no apostrophe in the last sentence, and "high schoolers" as somewhat of an awkward term compared to something like "students". Whether you think fixing these will help your introduction is up to you.
I also have to wonder if we can have more personality in your diction, since the narrator seems to have a distinct personality. It might even serve well for filling in stuff like more bare details for gods that didn't get them (compared to Artemis and Ares, for instance), as well as give the sense that we are in world more life. That principal Cronus sounds like a good example. Could his POV be worth taking?
I can see a really fun idea from the introduction you've published, and the addition of some world-building and alteration of word choice necessary to your overarching goal with the storybook will help drive your idea to life, I feel!
Hi Morgan! I gotta say, I really like the idea of turning the Greek mythos into more into a contemporary slice of life style story. There's a lot of potential there and it allows for some creative takes on the deities, something which I saw was already taken advantage of with the distinctions. Anyways, the only things I saw that were lacking were the picture and a small part near the end. Since the story is centered around the characters in a boarding school, I think a more fitting picture would be one that represents the boarding school they're attending. So the part near the end feels a bit jarring, I feel like the scene could have been set up a little more descriptively. As it stands, the description only gives the grades of the students, the name of the school, the location, and who's in charge in a very straightforward way. It might be more engaging to the reader if the school itself were described, with the interior and exterior being brought into the mind of the reader.
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ReplyDeleteI love your storybook website so far! The title you chose is very fitting. It’s simple but specific enough to where I can get a pretty good idea of what it is going to be about without even reading the introduction. The introduction is really good: I like how you opened up with questions; it really draws the reader in and gets them thinking. Like previous students have commented, high school is such a distinct memory in many people’s lives and will definitely be something very relatable. I can definitely see how this is going to be a really fun setting for your storybook, as it gives you a lot of creativity and flexibility. I am looking forward to reading your stories, and I am already thinking about the different gods and goddesses and what “role” they are going to have within this setting. One idea I have is for you to mix it up and surprise the reader by making some of the gods and goddesses different then what their expected stereotype would be, just to keep the reader on their toes!
Hey Morgan!
ReplyDeleteI really liked your idea for your storybook! (I wish I had even thought of it) It was very creative and right off the bat I was interested in getting to know more of what the Greek Gods and Goddesses were like in high school. There are SO many stories that you can play off of what your topic is. I think that you made the story relatable to everyone through this aspect. There are a few suggestions that I have to offer. I think that you should set up your scene of a boarding school a little earlier on before the characters. (Just a thought) I also think you should maybe change the story from being centered. I feel like it is somewhat harder to read that way.
What kinds of stories do you plan to include? Are you going relate each god or goddess to their specific roles in Greek Mythology? I am excited to read more of what is to come from you!
Hi Morgan. This is a cute idea. I like that you’re taking something that is very frequently used in mythology and doing something really unique with it. The idea of going back to the god’s high school days is very creative. The design of your page doesn’t have too much to it but I think you did a good job with the banner pictures at the top, on both the home page and the introduction. They’re ambiguous but obvious at the same time and they don’t take a ton away from the story itself.
ReplyDeleteI noticed one small error towards the bottom, the third paragraph up, “This is done to protect the students from those who wish to *hard* them.” I think the idea of the storybook being told from the principal’s perspective is fun too, because it gives a mature perspective on the teenage lives of the gods.
I’m a little confused about why you mention the superlatives but then jump to saying that you’re not going to tell about the characteristics that granted the gods those awards. I think it might flow better if you phrased that part just slightly different. Maybe after saying “You, my friend, are correct. There are many stories that I could share with you that would demonstrate how each person fits their superlative perfectly.”, you could say something along the lines of “well, I COULD tell you those stories but I think what you’d really love to hear are the stories that explain exactly “who” these gods are, behind all the smoke and mirrors.” Then, you could go into your sentence saying “I will spin you tales of love, heartbreak,…”
I think this is going to be a fun storybook though. Good job!
Morgan, you've truly outdone yourself again! I thought your first draft was pretty good, but this draft definitely hits the mark better.
ReplyDeleteI'm pretty sure that I didn't notice everything that you changed, but i'll comment on what I did notice.
First off, it looks as if you wrote more directly about what kind of stories you're going to be writing about. For example, "tales of love, heartbreak, happiness, etc." I think that's a nice edition to your intro!
Secondly, I think it is genius to leave your story open for other gods and demigods to be introduced throughout your future stories! I'm picturing Hercules and Achilles attending Olympus High and maybe being freshmen there? I don't know, just a thought! It'd be cool though!
Lastly, I love the idea of them being at a boarding school and living in the dorms! That just spells trouble and mischief right there! Now you have me wondering other events are going to play out because they can't just go "home" after the school day is over. Everyone will still be around each other, which could allow Ares to be even more of a bully to the other Greek gods.
I can't wait to read your first story! I wish the best of writing!
You have set up an intriguing premise. The Olympic gods in high school, I really cannot see that going to well. Right now, I am picturing them setting the school on fire for some reason. I do have some questions about you story? Are all the Olympians related or just random teens put together? Also is it going to be set in ancient Greek with modern schooling- like people wearing togas and athletic competitions in the nude- or just the modern world? I was really sad that your story is only going to be about the Greek pantheon, I think it would have been awesome if you had included other pantheons, even as an aside or as the teachers. Um, I do not think superlatives is the right word for the secondary titles, I think it is epithet, but feel free to double check me.
ReplyDeleteWow, Morgan, I absolutely loved your introduction! I chose to read your story this week because the title sounded fun and I was very entertained by it! It reminded me of Gossip Girl or some short of dramatic show with the opening line and I was instantly intrigued!
ReplyDeleteI think it is such a fun idea to use the superlatives to introduce the characters because they perfectly sum each god and goddess up. I am giggling at the thought of all the drama that probably occurs at a boarding school where headstrong deities live all the time- that cannot be easy and I am excited to hear all about it!
I like the that the principal is the narrator, but I almost wonder if the stories will be biased in some way because of his role? He probably would miss some of the details due to his job or be required to report some of the drama that ensues. It might be interesting to write the story from a made-up, lesser demigod who is not as popular but keeps track of all the gossip and conflicts around. Just a thought!
Overall, I really loved reading your story and I look forward to checking back in on it later! Good luck!
Hi Morgan! This is a great introduction, i really enjoyed it. I chose to read your introduction because your title reminded me of the Percy Jackson series, my favorite was “The Sea of Monsters.” This topic will be super easy to explore and you will be able to use your imagination for new and exciting adventures. I would love to see stories that really involve the gods and goddesses. These were always my favorite while reading the Percy Jackson series. After reading, “Located at the very top of Mount Olympus, the school is concealed so that outside eyes can't find where it resides. This is done to protect the students from those who wish to hard them.” This gave me a lot of hope that you will go in the direction of incorporating the gods. I can tell this story is going to turn out super good! I am excited to see how it turns out!
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ReplyDeleteI loved reading your introduction! Really fast I think there is a spelling error where you said, “This is done to protect the students from those who wish to hard them”. I think it is supposed to be hurt? Other than that you wrote your intro beautifully! I am doing a very similar storybook where the gods are teens and at summer camp, well it is the god’s teenage sons and daughters! I’m sure we could draw inspiration from each other, as we are so similar! I am curious to what your first story is going to be as I am currently picking mine out right now! I wonder if they have control over their special powers like the water for Poseidon! I could totally see Poseidon getting in a fight with his brother and flooding the school accidentally! I cannot wait to read your storybook and all the drama that unfolds! Good Luck!
Hi Morgan,
ReplyDeleteI really like your storybook project idea. Super creative! All of the superlatives were perfect and humorous as well! Your introduction made me really curious to know more about these dramatic high school gods. I think it would be great to allude to the different stories you will tell in your intro once you have those figured out! You could even just allude to your first story at the end of the intro. I was also curious about those who wish to harm the gods; you could give more details about that conflict as well! I did notice a typo in your story where "hard" is used instead of "harm." Also, immediately following that sentence "high schoolers" doesn't need an apostrophe there. I did not expect the narrator to be the principal; I thought that was an awesome touch! I'm interested to see where the stories of these high school gods will go!
Hey Morgan, To start off I really like the idea it is very unique and creative!! I found it funny and interesting reading your description about these highschool gods. It was nice to see you give stereotypical highschool characters for each of the gods in your story "three brothers". After reading the story I was wondering how you fit each god into a character but reading your authors note I was able to understand that! There might have been a formatting error in the first sentence of your author's note "and Hades first" the last word is split up into the next line. Overall great read, looking forward to reading more!
ReplyDeleteHi, Morgan! I just finished reading the introduction and first story for your Storybook and I absolutely love it! I can't wait to see what other stories you are planning on adding to your Storybook. Your introduction did a great job of drawing in my attention. I also liked the way you organized everything. It all flowed very well. I like how you chose to mention what awards the main gods and goddesses received in high school. That was really creative! I also think it was a really good idea to start of by talking about Zeus, Poseidon and Hades. I think it will help set the stage for the rest of the Storybook because you gave such great back-story to the three of them. My only suggestion is to read through your introduction a couple more times out loud. I saw just a couple of typos that I think you could fix if you give it another quick read through. Other than that, perfect!
ReplyDeleteYour storybook theme was such a cool idea! It reminds me of that old Disney channel original movie Sky High where all the superhero kids went to high school together. I love the “awards” that you gave each god in the introduction- it was funny and very creative. If you wanted to edit your first story, it could be cool to add in pictures of each of the three brothers in your story. It could give us more visuals and help you with your editing! Posiedon’s story is so creative and funny. Who would have thought that the god of water ended up as that because of a dare? I’m loving the creativity in your storybook and I hope that you create more stories soon so that we can learn about the other nine students you mentioned in the introduction! I hope you find some inspiring content to lead you on to your next stories!
ReplyDeleteThe transition from old mythologies to modern retellings is one of my favorite things in this class to read, so I was excited about this storybook as soon as I saw it. Because of how over-the-top the gods are and the way their powers help them fit easily into certain archetypes, Greek mythology and high school are kind of a perfect match, in an unexpected sort of way.
ReplyDeleteAs for the intro, the way you matched up the senior superlatives was pretty glorious, and I actually laughed out loud at a few of them. It was short, sweet, and to the point, providing just enough background setting before we launched into the rest of the storybook. “The Three Brothers” was a ton of fun, too. The way you played with Zeus’s powers and javelin-throwing was really clever (especially the way the thunder came from the crowd’s applause), but I think Hades’s was my favorite: from blackmailing Persephone into dating him to hanging out with the girl gang The Furies, you found perfect ways to reinterpret him. I’m looking forward to seeing what other stories you’ve got in store!
Hello again Morgan! I still think that you have a great storybook idea with the High School Gods. I also like your use of words to describe Zeus, Poseidon, and Hades. The imagery that you draw makes for a more vivid storytelling and that's always good!
ReplyDeleteBefore reading your story, Three Brothers, I was trying to figure out how you would write your stories and how the different relationships would play out among all the characters. To me, it seems like you're still setting up your story for what's going to happen later. What I mean by this is that we're getting a look at how all the gods acquired their superlatives. Obviously, this is the point of your story, to tell stories of how they got those specific superlatives, but I feel as if you could go more in-depth with the characters relationships. I hope that made some kind of sense haha. Anyway, I definitely look forward to reading your next stories!
Hi Morgan! This was the first time that I have ever read your story book and I was really hooked in by the introduction that you wrote. I love the idea of high school gods. It reminds me of the superhero high school movie from the Disney channel. In one of my stories, I put Rama and Ravana in a school setting so it also reminded me of that a little. I feel like your chapters really move the story forward in a well manner and it keeps the story interesting. Also the way that you transition between them is great and leaves me wanting to read the section in the story. The story was both funny and interesting. I definitely prefer reading some of the comical stories compared to the more serious ones. This storybook is great and should be something that you are proud of. Good luck with the rest of the semester!
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ReplyDeleteI wanted to revisit your storybook because I had enjoyed reading your introduction and couldn't wait to see what posts you were going to add. First off, I liked how you had a story talking about the brothers. I feel like it is good to get to know the different characters so that I am not lost. I think if I had any suggestions, it would maybe be to combine the descriptions of the brothers in the introduction and then have a first story after that? I feel as if the character should have already been introduced in the introduction. I really enjoyed how you did give your characters a bit description than I anticipated. I think it will really help in your stories to come. What kind of story are you planning on adding? Do the three brothers get in a fight? I would love to see some drama happen. Anyways, great story. Can't wait to read more!
Hi, Morgan. I'm from the Indian Epics class and this week we had free choice from either class. I had chosen two previous stories because of the r intriguing titles and they were great. I decided to continue that, and here I am. Like the previous two storybooks I read, your storybook did not disappoint in the slightest! Initially, I was hooked by the introduction that you provided. I could read stuff like that all day! I have to say that my favorite part of your various chapters is how you transition from one story to the next. It keeps me (and I'm sure others as well) wanting to read more and more to see what happens! I enjoy this type of story, as it feels liek a sort of relief when reading it. It just makes people happy. I lvoe your storybook, and good luck with the rest of your semester, Morgan!
ReplyDeleteHi Morgan, I read your story last week and was definitely looking forward to reading the second one today! I read the Three maidens. I enjoyed it a lot! You described the characters really well I felt like a lot of it was similar to "Mean girls" the movie. I was wondering, however, why was Aphrodite's section empty? Not sure if it was purposely left out or you did that intentionally. Anyways, great story keep it up!
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ReplyDeleteWhat a great idea! I never thought about what the gods would be like if they were teenagers. They’re already so dramatic as adults and I can only imagine what would happen during puberty. I love how you introduced everyone and I love parallels you created. The three most dominant gods and the three most dominant goddesses! There are so many ways you can go about Aphrodite’s story. Since she’s known for being… well, promiscuous, you can consider whether or not she was like that in high school. Did she always sleep with everyone or did something happen that made her that way? If you don’t want to use sex as a theme at all then maybe she can just be the nicest character in the story.
“Hera isn’t exactly the most well loved girl in school, but she is the most well known” I think it would sound better if you said something more along the lines of “Hera might not be the most liked in the school, but she’s certainly the most known.”
Other than that this story is great!
This is a fun idea for a storybook! I like how you drew in the reader with the superlatives, but then go into more depth with details about the school later in the introduction. I think it is going to be interesting to have these stories told from the perspective of the principal! I noticed two small typos in the introduction. You say, “Wish to hard them” when I am sure you meant “harm.” Also, in the introduction when you are talking about the head of a school it is “principal” rather than “principle.” Your first story was great! It was an interesting twist that the principal was also their father. I like how you chose to talk about the sons individually to kind of compare and contrast them. Their superlatives make more sense now that we know more background on the sons. Hades definitely stands out from his brothers! Your author’s note was also really good! I liked how everyone you chose to be in this story, like the Furies, had a specific reason. Great work!
ReplyDeleteHi again, Morgan! You've done such a great job developing this story and I was excited to check back in! What a tough situation that must be to be the father AND principal of Zeus, Poseidon, and Hades. I loved how he described the brothers and it made me so sad to read that he wished Hades would be more like his other brothers... I'm sure as a parent it's hard not to pick favorites but hopefully Hades was unaware of it! I also enjoyed reading about the three girls because they seemed to have a lot more drama (and a lot more cheating) on their hands to deal with. I am a little confused about Troy Paris choosing Aphrodite to be his girlfriend because it says later that she dates Hephaestus and Ares, but not Troy! Were they a short-lived relationship that never lasted past middle school? That would be so terrible to lose friends over a boy like that but I'm glad they all developed into more mature people afterwards. Also, how does the principal know about all of this cheating? Is it just common knowledge? It would stress me out to keep up with so much drama but boy, would it be entertaining! I also felt bad for Hera because that sounds terrible dating Zeus and having to deal with his ways. Hopefully she'll live him someday. Overall, great job and I was super interested throughout the entire story! Good job describing each character and how they all interact!
ReplyDeleteI loved this story. The introduction really made me want to read the rest of your story. In addition, I love the Greek god concept. It has always been an interesting topic for me to read. I think the overall concept you had was very creative. I would have never thought to tell a story about the gods being in a high school. It is easily relatable to current situations in high school. Like in your story, Zeus was the high-school jock. It makes sense because when someone thinks of Zeus the think of strong and popular, in terms of ranking. The idea is great and I think the story follows in its success. The pictures you chose are also perfect for the stories setting. I am not sure how to do this, but in other storybooks I saw people change the entire background of their page. I think it would be a cool idea to put some Greek ruins in the background, but that is just a personal opinion. Great job!
ReplyDeleteMorgan! The first thing that I noticed about your storybook is that I think the theme of the storybook could be expanded a little bit to make it more pleasing/interesting to look at. I didn't see a picture in your latest story, and I think that this is something that would add a lot to your story. I also think that having a more interesting background would be beneficial to your theme. I was drawn to your storybook because I thought that it sounded interesting- I love learning more about greek mythology and I was curious to see how you tied it into high school. I think that your introduction does a great job of explaining your storybook and your intentions with your stories to follow. Overall, I liked the setup of your stories and how they're split into different sections by the gods/ goddesses they are about. I think that differing the writing style a bit would have been beneficial. For example, I think that adding some conversation to your stories would have made it a little more interesting.
ReplyDeleteHey there! My name is Ali. I am from the Indian Epics class! I loved this storybook! I wish there would have been more! It was so fun! I didn't even think about the way you create a high school reality from Greek Gods. That would have been a smart idea for someone in the Indian Epics course as well. I think you are very creative and intelligent with the way you tie in some of the original concepts into your new story. Like the details surrounding 80 points or lighting bolts and javelin rather than football. It creates a great visual of Mount Olympus High School! You did a great job at explaining the characters too! I wish I would have had the opportunity to read some of the interactions between characters. The introduction built up the jealousy and love and drama. I am sad that I missed out on all of that!
ReplyDeleteMorgan, I loved this concept. I love stories about the Greek Gods, and this was a very interesting take on the normal stories. High school is something everyone can relate to so I think this was a great setting for your storybook.
ReplyDeleteI also thought you did a great job in writing your introduction. I like how you included the titles that each god won during their senior year. That was a cute touch. I also thought it was a great touch to include introducing the narrator and explain his relationship with the students. Great choice in making him their father as well as the Principal. I feel like if you were to go on and create other stories with these characters, you would have a great foundation for them. You’d also have a conflict of interest which I think you could have made really interesting.
I did notice a couple spelling errors throughout the introduction, but other than that, I didn’t notice anything major. You did a great job!